I chose one of the last paragraphs in the report to do my quick first fact check since the other parts will take a little more time to go through.
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1wG9Q9y-2Fg-8GJjcoYjuCOIdfCnmHTaUmrYc0HYhIuI/edit
Original paragraph:
As if to make things worse, the institutional racism extends further into finding employment. African Americans have man obstacles to overcome when searching for a job. The black community faces fewer job opportunities, high unemployment rates, lower pay, worse benefits, and massive job instability. Similar to other factors in institutional racism, (H)istorically(,) the labor market(,) for black individuals(,) has always been worse. For example, in 1921 riots ruined black business owners’ earnings in Tulsa, Oklahoma on the Black Wall Street (Weller, C. E.). Today(,) the labor market is not as strong as it has been previously (by) providing less (Fewer) opportunities and less access to jobs for the African American community. On top of that, black workers attain fewer stable jobs that do not have good benefits, nor do they pay well. Something so simple as finding a job provides just another challenge for black people to overcome in order to live a comfortable life. Unfortunately, for many of these people(,) they live with the harsh reality of not having the opportunity to break the cycle.
*The red highlighted areas are suggested grammar/wording changes. If I remember my English classes right, and Grammarly isn’t giving me wrong suggestions, then these might be some helpful tips.
- Personally, I would maybe nix the “similar to other factors…” part, since you are already talking about job inequalities, but approaching it from a historic reference. Maybe just go right into, “Historically, the labor market…”. It may be a smoother transition between your points.
- The article was published back at the end of 2019, so it will be interesting to see how these statistics are affected given the ongoing events with Covid-19. That being said, the information provided seems to all match up with your provided source and is still very relevant.
- I scored the resource at CRAAP score of 45/50. The only missing points came from just a couple very minor typos/grammatical errors. The citation within the article comes from reputable sources and peer-reviewed studies, so I see no issues there.